Rómen
by David Chapman
This text was first published on the Elfling list. It is a part of the longer cycle. For the first part entitled Númen see here.
Senda:
Rómenna i eleni nurrir ar Cúma lussa anquildessë.
Nan Andondi eäntë tápinë,
ar tára rahtar i oronti
i rénassë Ambarwa.
i minya tércano er rama;
óma tindómessë.
Nárë urya Andondi pella
ar i eleni tintilar
Úr lilta ortonnar
an Amaurëa túla
ar linderya lamë imbë i aicassi.
Sín Andondi pantar,
ar et i alcarë lutta.
Arien Hendunárelíva wíla
ter i calima mistë lírala,
ar linderyanen i móre ná rácina.
Úrin ná Rómen: Andondi urya
aire úrenen; cuivana laurelótello.
Rombar tambinë tulta Ancalimë
ar utúlie'n aurë.
Interlinear translation:
Senda:
Rómenna i eleni nurrir ar Cúma lussa anquildessë.
Tranquil:
Eastwards hum the stars and the Void whispers silently.
Nan
Andondi eänte tápinë,
But the Gates
are closed,
ar
tára rahtar i oronti
and tall soar the
mountains
i
rénassë Ambarwa1.
at the edge of the
World.
i minya tércano er rama;
The first herald
calls alone;
óma
tindómessë2.
A voice in the
twilight.
Nárë
urya Andondi pella
A flame burns beyond
the Gates
ar
i eleni tintilar
and the stars
tremble.
Úr3
lilta ortonnar
Fire dances upon the
mountaintops
an
Amaurëa túla
for Dawn is coming
ar
linderya lamë4
imbë i aicassi.
and her song rings
about the peaks.
Sín Andondi pantar,
Now the Gates open,
ar
et i alcarë lutta5.
and forth the glory
pours.
Arien
Hendunárelíva6
wíla
Arien fire-eyed is
riding
ter
i calima mistë lírala,
through the bright
rain singing,
ar
linderyanen i móre ná rácina.
and by her song the
night is broken.
Úrin7
ná Rómen: Andondi urya
Incandescent is the
East: The Gates burn
airë
úrenen; cuivana8
laurelótello.
with holy fire; born
of gold-flower.
Rombar
tambinë tulta Ancalimë
Copper trumpets
herald the Brilliant One
ar
utúlie'n aurë.
and the Day has come.
Notes:
1
Is the possessive right for here?
2
I used tindóme here for 'morning
twilight' - is this correct?
3
I think this is an archaic form, but can I still use it?
4
I could find no verb meaning 'echo' or 'ring' so I invented lam-'echo'
from root LAM- which yields similar words. Is this ok, or is there a
better
form to use?
5
Should I use lúta- 'flow' or ulya-
'pour' here? I got the feeling that
ulya is more like pouring water
from a jug, not something gushing out of a
hole. What do people think about this?
6
This is a compound I invented. It is composed of hendu
'eyes' (dual form)
+ nárelíva 'of fire'. Should I
use the possessive in nárelíva,
or is the
genitive better?
7
Is úrin 'blazing hot' still valid
in mature Quenya?
8
Should I use the part participle
here, I was unsure what to do to render
'born of something'.